Rough draft for final essay

Kayla Crowson
November 21, 2007
Instructor: Ryan Davidson

Parking On Campus is a Necessity
There are many uncertainties that college freshman face when first arriving to college. Freshman have to adjust, experience, and learn how to do things, such as finding their classes or learning to balance their time and priorities. These are the important things that most college students face and worry about. One thing that college students should not have to worry about is not being able to find parking spots on campus. Personally, I think that if enough people sit down and try to come up with ways to help the parking situation it could do a great deal of good for everyone.
One lack of parking situation is the fact that some people have to park far away from their dormitory, which can be a great hassle for that person especially if he or she is running late. Depending on where he or she is parked, he or she has to make sure they set enough time to walk to his or her car and make it to the place on time. For example, sometimes when I drive to the sorority house which can be several nights of the week, I have to make sure I leave my dorm twenty-five minutes early even though it only takes fifteen minutes to get to the sorority house driving from my dorm.
Another negative thing about the lack of parking on the Southern Miss campus is the fact when a person has to park far away from his or her dorm at night and are by themselves it creates an unsafe situation. For example, most of the time during the week when I drive, I have to park across Fourth Street, which is a ten minute walk to my dorm. When it is night and I am alone it can be intimidating and terrifying to walk back. The sad thing is that this situation cannot be helped. Therefore, the need of more available parking on campus is needed greatly, whether it is to make it somewhere on time or for the safety of a person.
Sadly, there is not even enough parking for a person to park for class. I know several people that have to arrive early to receive decent parking spots. If they do not arrive extremely early, they have to park far way from their class, which makes a person late and miss some of the class. All of this hassle due to the poor parking at Southern Miss, which can be avoided if people sit down and try to find a solution for the problem. Personally, I feel that everyone on campus knows of the situation and complains about it but does nothing to solve it. Therefore, the question is why not come up with a solution? All people tend to do is complain, but no one ever tries to take action to change theproblem of the lack of parking.
There can be several solutions for the lack of parking on campus. I think some factors that can help is that the faculty/staff parking can be shared with some of the students. Of course it is essential for faculty to have designated parking, but it seems that some of their parking spots can be used for students as well. Another thing that could help people to earn the privilege of reserved parking are the people who have the highest GPA’s, have an important office in a club or other student organization, or the students who go to class and only miss with excused absences. These factors can help motivate students to go to class, get involved on campus, and raise their grades. Another solution that could help the future Southern Miss parking is to build a parking garage or several parking garages. This helps make sure that every person is guaranteed a parking spot, which could release the stress, worry, or hassle for a person. Ideas and brainstorming such as these could be effective solutions for The University of Southern Mississippi parking.
The University of Southern Mississippi has an excellent academic, arts, and athletic program; Greek Life association; and many clubs and organizations, but the thing that I feel needs the most improvement is parking. The fact that this problem can be solved easily with just a little planning, time, and hard work ethic should help a person to realize the importance of taking action of this problem. Southern Miss is an excellent school and has excellent programs, but the fact that people cannot find parking to attend and participate fully in these programs is sad. Therefore, the parking problem needs to be solved soon, so that the teachers and students on campus are benefited greatly.

Two Questions:
1) What can I do to improve this essay?
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